The chart below gives information on the percrntage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010
The
given
bar graph provides details on the percentage of British Verb problem
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people
giving money
to charity
in two different year
Overall
it is clear that
more British people
gave money
to charity
in 1990 compared to 2010.however
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however,
people
giving money
to charity
aged 36to 65 for both years and people
aged from 18 to 25 were the least to give money
In 1990 British people
between the age
of 36-50 given
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gave
charity
and this
was the highest.however
approximately 17% Add a comma
however,
from
the 18-25 Change preposition
of
age
group was the lowest giving money
to charity
from the 26-35 age
group experienced a decrease in 2010 from approximately 31%to around
24%.and 51-65 Change preposition
to
age
group increased significantly from 35 to nearly 40 which was
the highest percentage for 2010.and Unnecessary verb
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also
65 percentage is increased gradually from approximately 32% to 35%.on the other hand
it was still a little higher compared to 1990Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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