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Only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is certainly believed by some individuals that only
people
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passengers
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 there are several advantages of only
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 travelling inside these vehicles will be
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, it can have some disadvantages as well. In
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 and draw a conclusion. on the one hand, there are several benefits of only travelling
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be in
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means of
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 because they
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 and
reaches
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 the fall quickly. The first merit of it is considered to be that only
people
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much
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people
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rich
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in such
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such
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these
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, it is
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a vehicle
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vehicle
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a vehicle
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 because
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 go on a trip to a different place every year. Another positive aspect is thought to be that need
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 are now adopting a modern way of living.
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 because the
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is
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 changing so that in the new
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poor
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 left.
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, despite
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 positives, driverless vehicles are very good and comfortable.
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, one of the major disadvantages of
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is that
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the driver-free car can connect battery in any situation.
this
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 is because strong bulging hackers from us can break into
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 vehicle. In conclusion,
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 only
people
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 can offer several positives there may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point of view,
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the advantages
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 of
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 will outweigh the disadvantages.

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Introduction Clarity
Clarify your introduction by directly addressing the question about the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. Avoid tangential or unclear statements.
Logical Structure
Maintain a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout your essay. Use paragraphs effectively to separate and emphasize each main point.
Use of Examples
Use specific examples to support your arguments about the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. This makes your essay more convincing and relevant.
Conclusion
Ensure your conclusion clearly summarizes your discussion and states your opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Relevance and Clarity
Work on the clarity and relevance of your ideas to specifically address the topic. Avoid broad and vague statements that do not directly relate to the question.
Grammar and Sentence Structure
Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance the readability and professionalism of your essay.
Balanced Argument
You attempted to discuss both positives and negatives, showing an effort to address both sides of the argument.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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