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Only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is certainly believed by some individuals that only
people
 travelling preposition these means of
transport
 will be
passengers
.
Although
 there are several advantages of only
people
 travelling inside these vehicles will be
passengers
, it can have some disadvantages as well. In
this
 essay try to discuss both
positive
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 and negative sides of
this
 and draw a conclusion. on the one hand, there are several benefits of only travelling
people
be in
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by
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the
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means of
transport
 because they
safe
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are safe
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 and
reaches
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reach
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 the fall quickly. The first merit of it is considered to be that only
people
 travelling preposition these means of
transport
 will be
passengers
.
For instance
,
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this
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 world very
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many
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much
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people
rich
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are rich
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in such
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such
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these
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this
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 things be
moreover
, it is
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a vehicle
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vehicle
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a vehicle
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need
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 because
people
 go on a trip to a different place every year. Another positive aspect is thought to be that need
people
 are now adopting a modern way of living.
That is
 because the
mass
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is
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are
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 changing so that in the new
21
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21st
 century there are no
the
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poor
people
 left.
On the other hand
, despite
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 positives, driverless vehicles are very good and comfortable.
For example
, one of the major disadvantages of
it
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is that
but
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the driver-free car can connect battery in any situation.
this
 is because strong bulging hackers from us can break into
this
 vehicle. In conclusion,
while
 only
people
 travelling preposition these means of
transport
 will be
passengers
 can offer several positives there may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point of view,
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the advantages
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 of
this
 will outweigh the disadvantages.
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Introduction Clarity
Clarify your introduction by directly addressing the question about the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. Avoid tangential or unclear statements.
Logical Structure
Maintain a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout your essay. Use paragraphs effectively to separate and emphasize each main point.
Use of Examples
Use specific examples to support your arguments about the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles. This makes your essay more convincing and relevant.
Conclusion
Ensure your conclusion clearly summarizes your discussion and states your opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Relevance and Clarity
Work on the clarity and relevance of your ideas to specifically address the topic. Avoid broad and vague statements that do not directly relate to the question.
Grammar and Sentence Structure
Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance the readability and professionalism of your essay.
Balanced Argument
You attempted to discuss both positives and negatives, showing an effort to address both sides of the argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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