User Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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Some argue that we should give more

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emphasize

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learning

English

than learning

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the local

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local

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language

in formal

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curriculums

curriculae

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however

, many native

languages

are at risk of being forgotten if they are not being passed on. I think that

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it is crucial for everyone to study

English

because it is a lingua franca and it should be useful in many aspects, but, our mother tongues should

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be preserved through funding and various programmes by

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and higher authority, as they are served as

part

of our cultures. On

one

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hand,

English

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language

is commonly used nowadays across the globe, and learning

English

should be

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beneficial

for many. It serves as a bridge to

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facilitate

communication in many parts of the

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, especially in

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bussines

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business

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prerequisite

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in pursuing higher education which eventually will open many doors for

oversea

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studies and to aplly better

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globally.

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, many

people

opt to study and undertake

IELTS

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the IELTS

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exam for

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proficiency to look for work opportunities in

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countries

such

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Kingdom, New Zealand and Australia.

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people

should not be putting down the importance of native

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. We should make sure that the local

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passed on to the younger generations because they carry unique

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and

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of our culture. The state should

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money to make programmes for

longevity

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of our cultures and

languages

while

the higher education systems should ensure

the

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languages

will always be

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curriculums

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, universities should offer courses

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gives

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support in

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preservation, and give recognition

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people

who contribute

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language

and culture preservation. In conclusion, we should acknowledge that

English

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language

is important because it connects

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forgotten by the world, as it is

part

of one unique culture.

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38Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Many people leave the countryside for the greater opportunities which are offered by cities. This move is not without disadvantages for both people and the environment. What are some benefits and drawbacks of urbanization?

many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people however that other types of progress are equally important for a country

Write a letter to your neighbor (who is also your friend) about the damage that occurs to your car while he parks his car in the space allotted to you. In the letter, you should: Describe the damage Say how you feel about this problem. Suggest on actions he should take.