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User Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

#user #english #school #languages #risk
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Some argue that we should give more
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emphasize
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on
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 learning
English
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 than learning
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the local
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local
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the local
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language
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 in formal
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curriculums
curriculae
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curriculums
,
however
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, many native
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 are at risk of being forgotten if they are not being passed on. I think that
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 it is crucial for everyone to study
English
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 because it is a lingua franca and it should be useful in many aspects, but, our mother tongues should
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 be preserved through funding and various programmes by
government
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 and higher authority, as they are served as
part
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 of our cultures. On
one
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 hand,
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English
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the English
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language
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 is commonly used nowadays across the globe, and learning
English
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 should be
benefial
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beneficial
 for many. It serves as a bridge to
faciliate
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facilitate
 communication in many parts of the
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world
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, especially in
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the bussines
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bussines
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business
 and tourism sectors,
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also
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and also
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prerequisite
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 in pursuing higher education which eventually will open many doors for
oversea
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overseas
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 studies and to aplly better
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jobs
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 globally.
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, many
people
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 opt to study and undertake
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the IELTS
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 exam for
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 proficiency to look for work opportunities in
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English speaking
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 countries
such
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 Kingdom, New Zealand and Australia.
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,
although
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 it is important to study
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,
people
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 should not be putting down the importance of native
languages
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. We should make sure that the local
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 passed on to the younger generations because they carry unique
identity
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identities
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part
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 of our culture. The state should
provides
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 money to make programmes for
longevity
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the longevity
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 of our cultures and
languages
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,
while
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 the higher education systems should ensure
the
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that
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languages
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 will always be
part
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 of our academic
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curriculums
.
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, universities should offer courses
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gives
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 support in
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 preservation, and give recognition
for
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people
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 who contribute
in
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language
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 and culture preservation. In conclusion, we should acknowledge that
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English
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the English
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language
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 is important because it connects
people
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 in the world through many fields, but we should never
make
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 native
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being
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 forgotten by the world, as it is
part
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 of one unique culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • facilitates
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • heritage
  • sustain
  • preservation
  • cultural exchange
  • advocating
  • crucial
  • technology
  • archives
  • responsibility
  • policy-making
  • curriculum
  • engagement
  • incentives
  • diverse cultures
  • international communication
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