User Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Some argue that we should give more
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learning
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than learning
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local
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language
in formal
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curriculums
curriculae
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curriculums
,
however
, many native
languages
are at risk of being forgotten if they are not being passed on. I think that
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it is crucial for everyone to study
English
because it is a lingua franca and it should be useful in many aspects, but, our mother tongues should
also
be preserved through funding and various programmes by
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and higher authority, as they are served as
part
of our cultures. On
one
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hand,
English
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language
is commonly used nowadays across the globe, and learning
English
should be
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beneficial
for many. It serves as a bridge to
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facilitate
communication in many parts of the
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, especially in
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bussines
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business
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prerequisite
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in pursuing higher education which eventually will open many doors for
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studies and to aplly better
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globally.
For example
, many
people
opt to study and undertake
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exam for
English
proficiency to look for work opportunities in
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countries
such
as
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Kingdom, New Zealand and Australia.
On the other hand
,
although
it is important to study
English
,
people
should not be putting down the importance of native
languages
. We should make sure that the local
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passed on to the younger generations because they carry unique
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and
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of our culture. The state should
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money to make programmes for
longevity
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of our cultures and
languages
,
while
the higher education systems should ensure
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languages
will always be
part
of our academic
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curriculums
.
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, universities should offer courses
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gives
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support in
language
preservation, and give recognition
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people
who contribute
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language
and culture preservation. In conclusion, we should acknowledge that
English
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language
is important because it connects
people
in the world through many fields, but we should never
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forgotten by the world, as it is
part
of one unique culture.
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  • lingua franca
  • facilitates
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • heritage
  • sustain
  • preservation
  • cultural exchange
  • advocating
  • crucial
  • technology
  • archives
  • responsibility
  • policy-making
  • curriculum
  • engagement
  • incentives
  • diverse cultures
  • international communication
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