Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages?

In these modern days, people often times have their gadgets at
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home
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for
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working from
home
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from
home
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disadvantages, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. In
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essay, I will discuss both
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the
benefit
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and
drawback
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of
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from
home
. On the one hand,
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from
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people away with their colleagues and could result
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the
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lack of emotional connection with colleagues.
Furthermore
,
this
would affect the enjoyment of working with others and
lose
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the chance to talk freely about
work
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For instance
, I am a remote worker and because of
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of
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interaction, I'm unable to be really close emotionally with my coworkers, resulting not the best teamwork.
Consequently
,
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a negative working environment.
On the other hand
, remote
work
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more flexibility. In some workfields, it's just not really important to be doing
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on site.
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, software engineers
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not really
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to be physically in the office. Especially, most
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software engineers are introverts and often times they would be more productive by remote
work
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Moreover
, by doing things remotely,
employee
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can preserve their energy,
instead
of
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it on their travel to
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.
To conclude
, in my
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virtual
work
bring
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a lot of advantages and
outweigh
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its disadvantages.
Although
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, some social events
are
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still
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to be
a
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media for the employees to have bonding time.
These kind
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of events could boost their teamwork and create
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working environment.
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