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The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games.

The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games.
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The table illustrates information about
amount
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the amount
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 of
medals
 that
has
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 been received by
high
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the top
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 ten
counties
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countries
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 in the Winter Olympic Games in the years
of
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1924 to 2018.
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, it can be seen that most of the countries
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stable
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the stable
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 proportion of three types of
medals
,
while
 some of them
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 slight differences. Germany and Norway two leader of the table booked their spot in the top with 408 and 368
medals
 respectively.
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The U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
 with 305
medals
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it's
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 spot in the fourth, only
laking
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 behind with 9
medals
 from Russia. It seems like Austria has unusual differences in gold, silver and bronze
medals
 as it is in Finland. These countries
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less
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 gold
medals
 than other kinds of
medals
. Sweden with
smallest
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 number of
medals
 about 158
take
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it's
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 place
in
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 the bottom of the table.
Submitted by Teo Halimov on

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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