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You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the vacation spot you have chosen •explain how you plan to spend your time there •invite your friend to join you on your vacation Begin your letter as follows: Dear….

#vacation #friend #•describe #spot #•explain #plan #time #•invite #dear…
Dear Sukhpreet, Hope you are doing great in your life. As you know we have got our summer break from school, I have planned a detailed trip where we can spend these holidays and enjoy our summer vacation. So, I have chosen
Goa
, as you know it is hot here in our country, why not chill in
Goa
.
Goa
 is full of beaches, greenery, seafood cuisines and many other things. It is a place that relaxes your mind when you watch the sunset sitting at a beach and the view of the beach is awesome there. Let me tell you how we are going to spend our week there. We will spend a week there. We will be going by bus. Once we reach our hotel room we will take some rest in the afternoon and in the evening stage we will head to a nearby shore where we will enjoy the drinks, music and sunset. The next day, we will be heading to a church. I have heard that it is a historical church and it's very famous in
Goa
 and close to that there is a fort. We will try cycling and horse riding as it is famous for it. At night, we will be visiting another waterfront which is very cool and people enjoy barbeque there. So, it is my plan for how we will be spending our quality and precious moment there. Sukhpreet, I am inviting you to join me on vacation. we will have a good time and bring back some precious memories from the trip. I hope you will not say no. Yours lovingly, Kulbeer Kaur
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Language Usage
Try to vary your sentence structure to add more complexity and make your letter more engaging.
Paragraph Development
To enhance clarity, ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details.
Expression
Consider adding more personalized elements to your invitation to make it more compelling and warm.
Task Achievement
The letter provides a clear and coherent outline of the vacation plans.
Tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and inviting, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
Structure
Good use of paragraphs to organize different topics within the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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