Banking and banks. The role of banks in the modern world. Large banks and their functioning. Working with clients. Payment Methods.

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Banking and
banks
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are very important for the functioning of the modern world. Without
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banks
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banks,
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the way we
use
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money
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would not work.
Banks
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enable
people
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to save
money
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, borrow
money
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and
to
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apply
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pay for things with ease and security. Each country in the world has its own
well known
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banks
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that have
branches
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in nearly every city so
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apply
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they are convenient for
people
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to
use
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.
People
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often have to visit the local branch of the
bank
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when they want certain services. There are
also
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some very big multinational
banks
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that have
branches
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in most countries in the world.
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the local
branches
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that are in most cities, each
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bank
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the bank
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will
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have a head office.
This
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is where all central tasks are performed that let the local
branches
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function. The
people
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who work in the
branches
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will be the
bank
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manager, the person in charge, and various tellers who work behind the
bank
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counter and help the
customers
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. There will
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likely be security guards to protect the
money
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, workers and
customers
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. Most
customers
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will just need to see the tellers when they go to the
bank
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if they are paying
money
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into their account as either cash or a check.
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, they might need to see the
bank
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manager if they want to open an account or if they have become overdrawn when they have spent more
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than there was in the account.
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if they want to borrow
money
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and get a loan the person will need to see the
bank
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manager who will have to approve it.
As well as
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being able to
use
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cash or checks to pay for things,
banks
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also
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offer their
customers
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the more convenient methods of using either a debit
card
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or credit
card
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. These methods are very convenient as you just need to carry a small plastic
card
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to be able to pay for anything. When paying with plastic you will need to either sign a receipt or enter a PIN number to confirm the purchase and that you are authorized to
use
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the
card
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.
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