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The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summurize the informationn by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summurize the informationn by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The presented bar chart compares the rate of
air
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pollution
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 in five developed nations measured in millions of
tones
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.
Overall
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, the USA, the UK , and Australia have emitted the highest
air
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pollution
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,
while
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 Australia and New Zealand
has
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have
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 produced the lowest
air
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pollution
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. Taking a closer look at the data, the northern hemisphere
countries
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 generate the highest
air
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pollution
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. Americans suffer from the worst
air
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 quality since the volume of
air
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 pollutants is 80
tones
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, twice higher than the
pollution
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 in other
countries
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. Following that, the UK and Australia produce a similar level of
air
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pollution
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, emitting 40
tones
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air
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of air
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pollution
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 to their regions. In southern hemisphere
countries
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,
on the other hand
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, the exposure
of
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to
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air
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pollution
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 is considerably better. The level of
air
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pollution
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 in
kangaroo
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Kangaroo
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 country is approximately a third million
tones
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while
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this
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 in New Zealand is 30
tones
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. It indicates that civilians in New Zealand enjoy the freshest
air
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 compared to other
countries
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, tones, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Air pollution level
  • Country-specific data
  • Highest/lowest levels
  • Overall trend
  • Significant differences
  • Industrialization
  • Population density
  • Environmental regulations
  • Emissions
  • Comparative analysis
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