The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart depicts some industries' contributions as a percentage of
Brazil
's
economy
in three different periods, which are 2009, 2019, and 2029.
Overall
, the share of five industries in
Brazil
's
economy
has different patterns.
For example
, Finance has become the largest contributor to
Brazil
's
economy
during the periods. Meanwhile, the contribution of the rest industries has fluctuated during the year, except for the Manufacturing industry which has decreased gradually for ten years and still continues. The percentage share of Finance in
Brazil
's
economy
was above 30
percent
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per cent
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in 2009 and 2019,
while
in 2029 it will reach 40
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
,
Food
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the Food
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Processing industry experienced a sharp growth in 2019 but the projection shows it will fall in 2029 to the same level of 2009. The same phenomenon has occurred
to
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in
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Oil, coal, and gas
company
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companies
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.
While
the Tourism sector experienced a slight
decreased
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decrease
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in its contribution to
Brazil
's
economy
from 2009 to 2029,
accounted
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accounting
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for 20 to 25 percent of the
economy
.
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