The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart depicts some industries' contributions as a percentage of

Brazil

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economy

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in three different periods, which are 2009, 2019, and 2029.

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, the share of five industries in

Brazil

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economy

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has different patterns.

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, Finance has become the largest contributor to

Brazil

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economy

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during the periods. Meanwhile, the contribution of the rest industries has fluctuated during the year, except for the Manufacturing industry which has decreased gradually for ten years and still continues. The percentage share of Finance in

Brazil

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economy

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was above 30

percent

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in 2009 and 2019,

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in 2029 it will reach 40

percent

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On the other hand

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Food

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the Food

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Processing industry experienced a sharp growth in 2019 but the projection shows it will fall in 2029 to the same level of 2009. The same phenomenon has occurred

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Oil, coal, and gas

company

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companies

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the Tourism sector experienced a slight

decreased

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in its contribution to

Brazil

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economy

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from 2009 to 2029,

accounted

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accounting

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for 20 to 25 percent of the

economy

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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