The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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What has been depicted in the first chart is the
energy
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consumption in the average household in Australia,
while
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the
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in the
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second graph, the amount of
the
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apply
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greenhouse gas emissions produced, is illustrated.
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, a large proportion of the
energy
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usage was allocated to heating and
water
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heating,
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the most greenhouse emissions result from
water
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heating and other appliances.
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the first chart, most significantly, nearly one-third and 42 % of
energy
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usage is used by
water
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heating and heating, respectively.
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, the share of
energy
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consumption was devoted to other appliances, which is not clearly specified (a minority). Cooling, lighting, and refrigeration collectively accounted for 13 % of
energy
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used. The second graph shows,
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water
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that water
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heating was the biggest source of greenhouse emissions, which is a bit above 30%, followed by other appliances.
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,
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heating, cooling, and lighting together totalling around a quarter, refrigeration was only responsible for 14 per cent of the total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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