The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
What has been depicted in the first chart is the
energy
consumption in the average household in Australia,
while
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second graph, the amount of
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greenhouse gas emissions produced, is illustrated.
Overall
, a large proportion of the
energy
usage was allocated to heating and
water
heating,
while
the most greenhouse emissions result from
water
heating and other appliances.
According to
the first chart, most significantly, nearly one-third and 42 % of
energy
usage is used by
water
heating and heating, respectively.
Moreover
, the share of
energy
consumption was devoted to other appliances, which is not clearly specified (a minority). Cooling, lighting, and refrigeration collectively accounted for 13 % of
energy
used. The second graph shows,
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heating was the biggest source of greenhouse emissions, which is a bit above 30%, followed by other appliances.
In addition
,
although
heating, cooling, and lighting together totalling around a quarter, refrigeration was only responsible for 14 per cent of the total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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