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The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The provided maps illustrate how Norbiton industrial town will be changed in the future. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that, there are several industrial changes, including residential areas,
play grounds
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playgrounds
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,
medical
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and medical
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centers
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 will be constructed in the future. In fact, some locations will
be remained
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 the same place. Getting back to the details, a part of the farmland will be eliminated and new houses will be replaced near the near to the farmland.
Moreover
, a new bridge will be built over the river. All the factories will demolished .
Furthermore
, a new roundabout will be built to the south
in
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 the city. Shops and
medical
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a medical
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center
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 will be constructed on the
left-side
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 and
right-side
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right side
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 of the roundabout, respectively.
Play ground
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Playground
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 will be built between houses and river. Roads will be expanded to reach new residential areas. School will be built to the east
in
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 the town.
Town
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The town
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 will not be altered.
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