The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in three different countries.
The table compares
average
yearly Add an article
the average
expense
of university students in three Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
diffrent
countries.
An inspection of the data in the table reveals that Correct your spelling
different
country
A is the most expensive with Correct article usage
a yealy
yealy
Correct your spelling
yearly
expense
of US $ 5,000 and Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
on the contrary
, country
C
is very budget friendly with Correct article usage
a minimun
minimun
yearly Correct your spelling
minimum
expense
of US $ 1,500 Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
while
country
B
falls in the middle range.
To begin
with
Accommodation contributes Add a comma
with,
major
portion of Add an article
a major
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the expense
expense
in all three countries A,Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
B
and C
with respect to 45%, 35% and 30%. Percentage
spent on food varies as 36 Correct article usage
The percentage
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
yealy
income is spent to manage food in Correct your spelling
yearly
country
C
which is really expensive and for A and B
it is 22% and 28%.
On the other
hand
amount spent on books is Add a comma
hand,
budjet
friendly in all countries contributing 3%, 9% and 21 Correct your spelling
budget
percent
.
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per cent
Amount
spent on leisure activities is almost Correct article usage
The amount
same
for Correct article usage
the same
country
A and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
B
while
it is 12 percent
for Change the spelling
per cent
country
C
. Other activities also
include some amount but that is
manageable.
To conlude
, Correct your spelling
conclude
main
contributor in Change the article
the main
term
of money is accommodation and the Fix the agreement mistake
terms
least
one is books and other activities.Correct your spelling
last
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