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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts on the left hand illustrate
electricity
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 generation from all resources in 2 different countries (
Germany
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 and
France
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), in 2009,
while
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 the pie charts shown on the right hand extract the
renewables
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 part. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, three kinds of sources were used for producing
electricity
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 including conventional thermal, nuclear and renewable, and
Germany
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 produced more
electricity
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 than
France
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. The main source of
electricity
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 production belonged to conventional thermal in
Germany
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 and nuclear power in
France
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, with 59.6% and 76%, respectively. Turning to
renewables
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,
Germany
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, with 17.4%, used 3.7% more than
France
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 with 13.7%.
Germany
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 utilized wind and biomass more than other resources with around 3/4 proportion of all renewable energies,
however
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, the most usage for
France
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 was
Hydroelestric
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Hydroelectric
, with 80%. In
France
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 solar had a negligible part in
electricity
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 generation from
renewables
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 (approximately 0.9%), and
Germany
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 with 6.1% of
renewables
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 used more solar energy.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, germany, france, renewables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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