everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs regardless of their level of academic ability

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permission to learn perspectives, whatever degree of academic skills, they have. I completely disagree with
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proven that
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not that easy to be accepted to
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without having any academic knowledge,because nowadays
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have
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high requirements and
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expectations
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.So,from my understanding
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it may have a poor impact on
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reputation,
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it would lead to
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academic
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performance
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instance:
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without academic abilities would be
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more attention in order to improve their knowledge equal to other
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,who have more attainments.It is undeniable that
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will not be able to catch up with the academic program.
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university
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will no longer have any fundamental features and
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will become publicly available for everyone,
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it will almost be impossible to teach all the
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:Pupils with poorly improved knowledge would have more tendency to make noises and ask questions ,
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’s attention,in perspective it may lead to conflicts between
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in conclusion,giving everyone freedom to entrance without high level of intelligence and skills , may lead to destruction of
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discipline and having no individual features.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic ability
  • admission criteria
  • equal opportunities
  • higher education
  • institutional resources
  • merit-based
  • qualification devaluation
  • under-qualification
  • vocational training
  • inclusive education
  • diversity in academia
  • competitive edge
  • global economy
  • academic standards
  • universal access
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