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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
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The line graph illustrates how many fruits were manufactured
in particular
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 areas(
France
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, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Spain was by far the most important place
of
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fruit
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 generation over the period shown.
Moreover
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,
fruit
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 production in
France
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 and Turkey saw increasing trends,
while
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 in other two countries witnessed opposite trends. In 1970, roughly 5.5
million
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tonnes
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 of
fruit
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 were produced in Spain. By 1980, the figure in that country reached
to
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a peak of just over 6
million
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tonnes
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, before slightly decreasing
at the end
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 of
this
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 period. Regarding
to
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Germany, the amount of
fruit
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 generated went down consistently to approximately 1.5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990.
However
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, the amount remained stable before negligibly dropping by 1.3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2010. In 1970,
France
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 provided the lowest amount of
fruit
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( 1.2
millions
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million
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tonnes
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),
whereas
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, in the following years, the production from
France
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 overtook the production from Germany,
then
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 experienced a fluctuating increase to around 3
million
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tonnes
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.
Besides
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, the generation in Turkey saw a steady growth for the whole 40-year period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, fruit, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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