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You recently registered for a course and you cannot attend the class for some reasons. Write a letter to your course instructor and in your letter. - introduce yourself - explain this situation - and say what action you would like to take

Dear Sir or Madam The reason why I am
adressing
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addressing
 you is that I am going to tell
about
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you about
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 some reasons
as well as
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 I cannot attend your course called " Avtoshkola " in the light of who will go out from
this
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 town.
Firstly
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, I am Tom Smith and I
have
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apply
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joined
to
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you
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your
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 course two weeks ago and I am going out today. So, I do not attend
to
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apply
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your course. I am going to explain my situation. As I said above, I am leaving today.
One
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On
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 the hand, my parents
calling
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called
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 for my brother's wedding.
On the other hand
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, my sister is going to go out from her homeland. I am going to tell
what
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you what
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 I
wanted
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want
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 who
have
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has
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desire
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the desire
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, you give back my money.If you do not cash
bavk
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back
 that money, I will make a complaint to
police
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the police
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. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Tom Smith.

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Introduction clarity
Ensure your introduction clearly states the purpose of your letter. It helps to directly mention your intention to discuss your inability to attend the course and seek a resolution.
Writing tone
Maintain a polite and respectful tone throughout your letter. Phrases like 'I will make a complaint to police' might come across as too aggressive. Instead, you can express your hope for a mutually agreeable solution.
Explanation clarity
Provide a clear and logical explanation of your situation. Avoid jumping between ideas without clear connections or explanations.
Polite closing
In closing, you may want to reiterate your request or thank the instructor for their understanding and assistance, enhancing the tone of respect and politeness.
Task Coverage
Your letter successfully identifies the three aspects you're supposed to cover: an introduction of yourself, explaining the situation, and stating your desired action.
Structure attempt
You've managed to maintain a structure that attempts to separate introduction, explanation, and your request, which is good practice for clear communication.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolled
  • academic or professional development
  • circumstances
  • prior commitments
  • regret
  • recordings
  • online resources
  • make-up classes
  • independently
  • proceed
  • correspondence
  • reiterate
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