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you are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend, Asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need Saying why you need them Making arrangements to meet

#city #country #friend #home #visit #email #arrangements
Dear Ziyoda, How are you? I am happy
from
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 you coming here. The reason why I am addressing you
that
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 I want to inform
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you about
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about
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 you
need
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need to
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 bring some things from home. The specific items which local snacks and traditional
spicies
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species
spices
,
such
 as specific books that are not available in your current location. So, I am
goin
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going
 to ask you to bring these things from
jome
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home
. I mention items are important to me. Because, I miss the taste of time, want to share the culture with
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 in
the
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 foreign country. You might want to rest after your journey. I offer to pick them up from
airport
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the airport
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 or arrange a meeting place that's
conveient
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convenient
 for both. I suggest
to meet
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meeting
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 on 6th
may
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11
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at 11
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 o'clock.
Moreover
, I provide alternatives in case the items cannot be brought along showing
understanding
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 of
huggage
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luggage
 limitations or customs regulations. I wait to visit a piece of home brought
me
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.
Also
, I hope you do not keep waiting. Thank you for considering your request and
offer
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 to reciprocate the
favor
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. Best wishes, Ziynat.
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Greeting & Conclusion
Pay attention to your greeting and conclusion to make your email more polished and complete.
Grammar & Clarity
Try to proofread your email to correct minor grammatical errors and improve clarity.
Paragraphing & Structure
Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas and requests, improving the readability of your email.
Details on Plan
Be more specific in your arrangement plan, providing a clear date, time, and method of communication for the meeting.
Main Request
Successfully communicated the main request for specific items from home.
Expression of Importance
Expressed the importance and reason for the requested items effectively.
Consideration & Flexibility
Showed consideration by offering to meet at the airport and understanding potential limitations.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anticipation
  • cultural artifacts
  • customs regulations
  • express excitement
  • luggage limitations
  • reciprocate
  • traditional spices
  • local snacks
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