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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The charts illustrate the fraction of
energy
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 which is produced from a variety of sources between the years 1985 and 2003 in one
country
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 comprising
oil
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, nuclear,
hydrogen
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, coal, natural gas and others.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the main resource in the
country
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 is
oil
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 and both
hydrogen
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 and other renewable generate
energy
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 the least.
To begin
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 with,
oil
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 in 1985 occupied well over 50% of
energy
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 production in the
country
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and
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followed by nuclear and natural gas which registered 22% and 13% respectively. The
energy
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 in the
country
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 is produced by coal at 8%
while
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hydrogen
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 and renewable resources were about 4% and 1% in 1985.
Additionally
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, the
energy
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 that came from
oil
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 in the year 2003 decreased to 39%
as well as
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 nuclear which
also
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 declined by 5%.
On the contrary
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, the proportion of natural gas and coal was shot up to 23% and 13%,
furthermore
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, other renewable which rose by 3% in 2003. Only
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hydrogen
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the hydrogen
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 source remained the same percentage as in 1985.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, country, oil, hydrogen with synonyms.
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