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The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The visual illustration gives information about how many people were infected with
diarrhea
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diarrhoea
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 in Mashhad over the period of 10 years from 1983.
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, the number of patients fluctuated over the years and reached the highest figure in 1989. In the first
year
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, there were 100
cases
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 of
diarrhea
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diarrhoea
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 reported in Mashhad and
this
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 quantity was relatively stable in the next 2 years.
Afterward
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, the
cases
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 increased moderately to roughly double in 1986 and 1987.
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, the upward trend did not
last
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 since the figure suddenly dropped to the level of 100
cases
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 in the next
year
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. Following that, the
last
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year
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 of the ‘80 decade witnessed a swift rocket to the peak of the number of
cases
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 by claiming approximately 400
cases
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, which was four times more than the previous
year
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. 1990 came with a slight drop in the number of
cases
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 and plateaued at just above 350 people a
year
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 later until down to zero
at the end
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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