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Band 5

In many countries, the costs of living are rising. What are the effects on individuals and society? Suggest solutions to this problem.

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Due to
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 urbanisation and modernisation, living costs are increasing around the world
everyday
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, so there is a negative impact on
people
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 and society as a whole.
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about
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various issues that are arising, and
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 some solutions to overcome them. With
increase
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the increase
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 in inflation,
its
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 hard for
people
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 to
fullfill
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fulfil
 their basic needs like food and shelter. All members of
family
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the family
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 have to work in order to manage their living.
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 leads to
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 impact on relationships.
People
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 these days do not have time for each other as everyone is working,
family
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and family
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bond
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is
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 getting weak.
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, children are suffering as parents do not have time to monitor them.
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, with lower income
people
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 have to cut down their costs for leisure
actvities
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activities
 as they prefer to spend their money on
neccessary
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necessary
unnecessary
 items like
grocceries
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groceries
.
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, it is impacting
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their standard of living.
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,
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increased
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 cost of living, crime rates are increasing in
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society,
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,
people
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 these days are
commiting
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committing
 more crimes like robbery and stealing. As far as solutions
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 these problems are concerned, the government have to step forward.
Firts
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First
 of all, the government can subsidise the
neccessary
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necessary
 items like food, petrol and energy.
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, the government can
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 increase tax slabs,
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 would help
people
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 to save more money, and
people
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 would left with enough savings every month from their income, when
people
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 have enough money to support their living
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 will ultimately reduce the crime rates in the society. Another solution could be that companies need to increase the wages of their employees in order to match
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rising inflation rates. In conclusion,
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 inflation is
on
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peak
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 causing
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 of problems in the community, with the collaboration of the
governement
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government
 and large companies, with the help of supportive programs like increasing tax slabs and subsidies, increasing salaries can help to curb the issue.

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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, work on connecting your ideas more smoothly and logically. Use a variety of transition words and phrases to link your sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Aim for a more varied sentence structure to improve the readability of your essay. This includes mixing simple, compound, and complex sentences to show a range of grammatical structures.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, focus on developing your ideas further with more detailed examples and explanations that are directly linked to the effects on individuals and society, as well as deeper exploration of the suggested solutions.
task achievement
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and fully develops that idea, avoiding generalizations where specific examples could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion that bookend your essay effectively, presenting your argument and summarizing your main points.
task achievement
You successfully addressed all parts of the task, discussing the effects of the rising cost of living on individuals and society and suggesting potential solutions.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disposable income
  • leisure activities
  • inflation
  • exacerbate
  • inequality
  • social tensions
  • mental health issues
  • social welfare programs
  • purchasing power
  • tax incentives
  • subsidies
  • affordable housing
  • budgeting
  • financial literacy
  • mitigate
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