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The image below explains the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

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The given illustrations convey the basic process of how contaminants from the present time have an influence on creating polluted
clouds
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consequently
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, it has a negative effect on the environment and the food web. In general,
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 is a natural process,
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, in
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 people are involved. As we can see, it is harmful to our environment. First of all, houses, transport, factories, and power stations are producing smoke which goes to the
clouds
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.
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,
pollutants
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 rise to cloud chemical elements,
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 as carbon, sulfur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury, and other compounds, which create
clouds
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 that absorb
pollutants
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. The resulting
clouds
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 laden with
pollutants
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 cross countries and continents, and it could rain with acid at any time.
Afterward
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, rain falls to hills and fields, trees and plants, where our food supply grows, and
pollutants
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 enter the food chain.
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, falls have an impact on the rivers and lakes, where water organisms can suffer from these
pollutants
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 rain.
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structure
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cohesion
Introduce a wider range of sentence structures and linking words to enhance the flow of your essay.
examples
Incorporate a variety of specific examples and explanations to give depth to your argument and more effectively demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
topic understanding
You effectively communicate the process from pollution sources to the impact on the environment and food chain, showing a good understanding of the topic.
coherency
You have made a good effort to ensure that the essay is coherent, with a logical flow from one point to the next.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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