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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts depict the information about
Visitor
Correct article usage
the Visitor
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 Satisfaction survey of Ashdown
museum
Capitalize word
Museum
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 before renovation
as well as
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 after renovation.
Overall
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, it can
bee
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be
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 seen from the chart that, not only
rise
Correct article usage
a rise
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 in satisfaction but
also
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shoot up
Verb problem
apply
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in the number of Individuals after
refurbishment
Correct article usage
the refurbishment
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 of
Ashdown
Correct article usage
the Ashdown
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museum
Capitalize word
Museum
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.
According to
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 the table which provides total number of visitors before renovation was 74,000. In
Pie
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the Pie
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 Chart of that survey,
most
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the most
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 noteable point
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that
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apply
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is
in
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that
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 the Proportion of dissatisfied People
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 more than the Satisfied individuals by 40% and 30%. Very satisfied, very dissatisfied and no response had less amount than 20% which were 15%,
10
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and 10
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%. and 5%. After refurbishment, the number of visitors Swelled Significantly.
In addition
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, there
were
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was
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also
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rise
Correct article usage
a rise
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 in the proportion of very satisfied and satisfied by 35% and 40%.
However
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of dissatisfied and very dissatisfied tumbled down and reached
to
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apply
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15%
,
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apply
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 and 5%.
Moreover
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, No response did not show any movement.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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