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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts depict the information about
Visitor
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the Visitor
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 Satisfaction survey of Ashdown
museum
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 before renovation
as well as
 after renovation.
Overall
, it can
bee
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be
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 seen from the chart that, not only
rise
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a rise
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 in satisfaction but
also
shoot up
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in the number of Individuals after
refurbishment
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the refurbishment
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 of
Ashdown
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the Ashdown
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museum
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Museum
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.
According to
 the table which provides total number of visitors before renovation was 74,000. In
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the Pie
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 Chart of that survey,
most
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the most
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 noteable point
that
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is
in
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that
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 the Proportion of dissatisfied People
are
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is
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 more than the Satisfied individuals by 40% and 30%. Very satisfied, very dissatisfied and no response had less amount than 20% which were 15%,
10
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and 10
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%. and 5%. After refurbishment, the number of visitors Swelled Significantly.
In addition
, there
were
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was
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also
rise
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a rise
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 in the proportion of very satisfied and satisfied by 35% and 40%.
However
,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of dissatisfied and very dissatisfied tumbled down and reached
to
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15%
,
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 and 5%.
Moreover
, No response did not show any movement.
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