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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.
The graph information shows female unemployment rates in each country of the U.K. in 2013 and 2014. There are four countries. By 2014, the highest rate had increased
at
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in
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 Scotland.
In contrast
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, Northern Ireland recorded the lowest figure in 2014. All ratings in Scotland increased by
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a percent
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, there was a noticeable increase in
percentage
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the percentage
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 in England
at
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in
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 2013. Many people
worked
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work
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 in
this
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 country. By 2014, it had fallen down. The unemployment rate in Northern Ireland between 5.6% and 4.6% was higher.
The watching
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Watching
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 reality show and game shows clearly
appeal
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appeals
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 more to one of the age groups. But there are only 4% from the younger age group.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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