The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.

The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.
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table illustrates the four items used by adults and children in common
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the United Kingdom in 2004.
This
was calculated in four different category they are
food
, electronic materials, songs and videos.
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from the eldest to the youngest from both
the
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gender.
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includes all the age
group
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.
Firstly
the adults, where the
food
consumed by them is 28%
whereas
the usage of gadgets is 15% and listening to songs and playing videos is less than 5%.
Secondly
,
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to the men and women consumption of
food
is almost a quarter.
Besides
the intake of
food
in the others is quite less than the intake of women. The percentile of electronic equipment is quite less than a quarter and music and videos
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alos
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also
very low. The next comparison comes down to the Boys and Girls, here the percentage of
food
is lesser than the adults but the consumption of others is too high. The highest count is on
the
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Music which ranges
upto
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36% and 38%. The
last
one
are
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the
childern
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children
here the usage of electric
devises
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and music is the highest of all the others which is quite surprising.
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