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The graph below showes the differences in wheat exports over three different areas

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The graph represents the differences in wheat exports in Australia, Canada and
European
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the European
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 Community in the years 1985-1990
Overall
, at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 Canada was the highest,
while
 Australia was the lowest. in
comparsion
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comparison
,
at the end
 of the
period
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period,
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European
commmunity
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community
 was the highest. As can be seen from the graph
that
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apply
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Canada had significant growth between 1986 to 1988.
Then
, it had a peak in 1988
by
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at
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 25
millions
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million
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.
However
, it had sharply declined in 1989. It is interesting to notice that Australia and
European
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the European
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 community both had fluctuated throughout the period.
Moreover
,
European
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the European
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 community
remaind
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remained
 stable
in
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from
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 1987 until 1988.
Then
, it began to grow gradually to
reached
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reach
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 about 21
millions
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million
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.
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Introduction Improvement
Adding an introduction that clearly outlines the main trends or significant points observed in the graph will enhance reader understanding.
Conclusion Enhancement
Try to provide a more detailed conclusion summarizing the main changes over the given period, highlighting the most significant trends.
Specific Examples Enhancement
Including more specific data points from the graph to support your analysis will strengthen your argument and provide a clearer picture to the reader.
General Analysis
The essay provides an overall clear analysis of the trends in wheat exports among the three regions, indicating an understanding of the general patterns.
Logical Structure
You have successfully created a logical structure by discussing each region separately, which makes your essay easy to follow.
Addressing Differences
The fluctuation and changes in wheat exports for each country are described, showing an effort to address the differences across the stated period.

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