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The table shows price of a cup of coffee in six cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014. write an essay and summerize the details.

The table shows price of a cup of coffee in six cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014. write an essay and summerize the details.
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The table demonstrates the cost of a
cup
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 of coffee in
numorous
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numerous
 cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.
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, the city of Melbourne had the highest rate of change
in
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at
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 the time of the survey.
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, Canberra and Adelaide
both
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 accounted
the
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for the
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 lowest percentage of
price
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 alteration. In 2010, the most expensive
cup
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 of coffee was being sold in Perth
with
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at
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the
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a
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 cost of 3.70
dollars
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. In
constrast
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contrast
, the
price
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 of each
cup
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 in Sydney was 3.10
dollars
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 which was the minimum
price
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. Other cities had all maintained their
price
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 number from 3.15 to 3.35
dollars
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 in the year 2010; with Brisbane and Canberra
both
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 standing at 3.35
dollars
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.
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, Perth
accounts
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accounted
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 for the highest number in 2014, at 3.95
dollars
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 a
cup
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.
Although
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 Melbourne and Adelaide
both
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 share an equal cost for coffee, the
growth
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 of
price
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 in
Melbournce
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Melbourne
 is much more immense, with a 9.5
percent
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per cent
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 raise.
While
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 Sydney has the lowest
price
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 for
this
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 beverage, its level of
growth
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, which is 8.1
percent
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per cent
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, is quite
noticable
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noticeable
. the city of
Cnberra
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Canberra
 and Adelaide have
both
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 had a 4.5
percent
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per cent
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growth
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 each which is the lowest level of
growth
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 among all six cities.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cup, both, price, dollars, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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