The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
gives
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information on
people
of different
age-groups
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age groups
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that are contributing to the
population
of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
also
projects
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project
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the
population
growth for
year
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2050. From the general
trend
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it can be seen that
people
falling in
age
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group 15-59 will increase in Yemen and for Italy it will decrease by 16%.
Overall
, a significant decrease can be
noticied
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noticed
notified
in
near
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future in Yemen as
people
that
falls
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in
age
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- group 0-14 dropped by 20 per
cent
and
on the contrary
, a noteworthy rise can be predicted in 50 years in teenagers-59 years
while
population
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growth of
people
in their 60s is 3.6 per
cent
in 2000 and 5.7 per
cent
in 2050.
On the other
hand
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a
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opposite trend can be seen in
population
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growth of Italy as a significant increase in
population
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of
eldery
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elderly
people
can be predicted as it will double in 2050 reaching
to
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42.3 per
cent
which means that
economic
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burden will increase on Italy. In
italy
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birth rates
is
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decreasing drastically as
for
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the
prediction
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it will decline
4
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per
cent
and will reach 11.5 per
cent
and
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also
a decline in
adolescent
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population
can be seen
such
as it decreases
by
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more than 20 per
cent
in
predicted
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the predicted
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50 years.
To conclude
, Italy needs to focus on their birth rates.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, population, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population demographics
  • projected
  • projections
  • notable changes
  • demographic changes
  • implications
  • birth rates
  • life expectancy
  • senior citizens
  • young population
  • working-age population
  • dependency ratio
  • aging population
  • socio-economic impact
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