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Nowadays, many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying their house. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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These days certain
people
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 prefer to buy a rented
house
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 more than purchase their own
house
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the pros and
cons
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. Nowadays a variety of
people
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 do not like to spend time making a new
house
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 or purchasing a
house
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 because they say it is a waste of time.
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, buying
rent
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 a
house
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. it is the majority of
people
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 are very easy.
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, my brother is a doctor his first occupation was as a Jaffna
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 he has family who have to go there so they are buying
rent
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 a
house
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 in Jaffna. It is convenient for their occupation.
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, it is more
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. Buying a rented
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 because, before buying
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 a
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people
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 needed to pay extra money for five months.
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 when they are it returns back to the
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 with some damage to the property they have to pay extra money.
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,
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 way they have to change the address and children's schools. But it is temporary. Since renter houses more
cons
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 society
people
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 more than purchase
house
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. In conclusion, the majority of
people
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 buy
rent
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 houses for there is occupation or they do not have enough time to make a
house
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 or they have some financial problems.
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 it is more
cons
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 to their lifestyle.
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introduction
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paragraph structure
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to outline the main idea you will discuss.
supporting ideas
Ensure every paragraph focuses on a single main idea and use examples to support your points clearly.
expression clarity
Work on the clarity of your expression to avoid confusing sentences. Using simpler sentences might help maintain clarity.
coherent linking
To improve cohesion, use linking words (Moreover, However, For instance) more consistently to connect your ideas smoothly.
structure
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
example usage
You've used a relevant personal example to support your point, which is good practice.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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