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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicted below illustrates the monthly value changes of three metal substances (copper, nickel and zinc) in the year 2014, on average. the vertical and horizontal axes show percentages and months, respectively. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that Nickel changed a lot during
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 period,
however
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, others remain more stable with a few changes.
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 the chart, nickel started at 6%, in January 2014, but its growth
rate
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 dropped after two months by 5% to about 1%. It remained steady after a month, and it decreased a little to 0.5%. In May 2014, its growth
rate
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 stopped and its value decreased in June to -3%. After that, its price
rate
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 increased to -1% and
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at
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 the end, it was about 1%. Turning to zinc, at the beginning its growth
rate
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 was approximately 1%, after a month it reached its highest
rate
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 (3%). After that, during the next months its
rate
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drop
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 significantly to around -1%.
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it increased to 2% ,in December 2014.
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 but not least, copper which started at 2%, with minimum
up
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 and downs, ended 2014 with roughly 1.5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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