You should spend about 20 minutes on the task. The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The maps depict information about buildings' distribution in James Park in 2017 and changes that have been proposed to be rebuilt in 2027.

Overall

, currently, there are five main structures with a short footpath,

while

in the future most of them will be bigger and a new gymnasium will be constructed. In detail, there is a pathway that crosses the whole park from west to east with two branches to the main and toddler playgrounds located at the west and southeast points, respectively.

Nevertheless

, the main green zone will be the unique playground because a theatre will be placed in the children's area.

Furthermore

, in the northwest, there is a science centre that will be extended to occupy until the northeast.

Additionally

, the fountain will be turned into a garden at the northeast, next to the aforementioned building.

On the other hand

, the sports centre will be at the southeast corner.

Finally

, the statue will remain in the centre of the park

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