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chart above shows the number of people visiting museums in London in the 5 months in 2021.

chart above shows the number of people visiting museums in London in the 5 months in 2021.
The bar chart illustrates the number of people who visited museums in the United Kingdom in the 5
months
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 of 2021.
Overall
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 it is noticeable that , the highest number for the British museum .
In contrast
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 , the lowest number of people for
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the Nationals
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Nationals
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Museum. In the
months
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 of June and July , over 400,000 people visited , increasing drastically following the month of August to 600,000 and dropping to below 300,000 in September and December respectively.
On the other hand
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 , in National museums,around 200,000 public visited , over the 4 given
months
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 and the lowest in the
months
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 of July
as well as
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 December close approximately to June . Science museum has fluctuation over four
months
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 , starting with around 400,1000 visits in June slightly decreasing the following month and remaining unchanged in July and August with 400 000 . And grew upto 500 000 in September , decline to 300 000 in December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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