The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The given charts predict different formats of film both rentals and

sales

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reported in 2002 and 2011. It is immediately noticeable that the

sales

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of DVDs and rentals went

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the opposite directions of growth; rentals and VHS

were

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apply

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dropped

while

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the

sales

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DVD

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DVDs

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were

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apply

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grew

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. The VHS were;

however

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, got very few

sales

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, and Blu-ray had the least

sales

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among all. Renting films was the most popular

2002

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in 2002

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with almost 180,000 copies

were

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borrowed;

however

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, since

then

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, the number

had

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has

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declined gradually until hit

its

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apply

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rock bottom in 2011 with just over 50,000 rental copies.

Similar

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pattern of VHS in 2002, its amount of

sales

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was the second to most which

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are

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about 80,000

sales

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;

however

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, it decreased until it reached 10,000

sales

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in 2005 and completely gone in 2006. DVD

sales

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started from around 40,000 companies but surged up to

its

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their

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peak in 2007 with 210,000

sales

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and

plateau

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plateaued

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since

then

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Lastly

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, the least among all is Blu-ray

sales

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which started to

growth

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grow

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in 2007 with less than 10,000

sales

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then

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slightly rose and ended the 2011 with just over 10,000

sales

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Apr 28, 2024

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Trend
Rentals
Sales
Formats
VHS (Video Home System)
DVD (Digital Versatile Disc)
Blu-ray
Peak
Decline
Rise
Market changes
Digital downloads
Physical formats
Over the years
Annual
Comparison
Impact
Technological advancements
Shift
Predictions

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