The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.
The given charts predict different formats of film both rentals and
sales
reported in 2002 and 2011. It is immediately noticeable that the
sales
of DVDs and rentals went
to
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the opposite directions of growth; rentals and VHS
were
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dropped
while
the
sales
of
DVD
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were
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grew
up
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. The VHS were;
however
, got very few
sales
, and Blu-ray had the least
sales
among all. Renting films was the most popular
2002
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with almost 180,000 copies
were
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borrowed;
however
, since
then
, the number
had
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declined gradually until hit
its
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rock bottom in 2011 with just over 50,000 rental copies.
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pattern of VHS in 2002, its amount of
sales
was the second to most which
is
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about 80,000
sales
;
however
, it decreased until it reached 10,000
sales
in 2005 and completely gone in 2006. DVD
sales
started from around 40,000 companies but surged up to
its
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peak in 2007 with 210,000
sales
and
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since
then
.
Lastly
, the least among all is Blu-ray
sales
which started to
growth
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in 2007 with less than 10,000
sales
,
then
slightly rose and ended the 2011 with just over 10,000
sales
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Rentals
  • Sales
  • Formats
  • VHS (Video Home System)
  • DVD (Digital Versatile Disc)
  • Blu-ray
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Rise
  • Market changes
  • Digital downloads
  • Physical formats
  • Over the years
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Impact
  • Technological advancements
  • Shift
  • Predictions
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