The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
a
number of people employed in different fields of work both men and Correct article usage
the
women
in Australia Use synonyms
last
year .
Linking Words
Overall
, it is clearly noticeable that females Linking Words
has
the highest Change the verb form
have
employed
in clerical and males in Tradespeople.Lowest Replace the word
employment
women
in the Production and tradesperson.
Use synonyms
To begin
with managers , they are 600 000 male employees and just 200 000 Linking Words
in
female , followed by Professionals between 600 000 and 700 000 among both.Change preposition
apply
Semi-professional
above 500 000 in men's and below 400 000 in Correct your spelling
Semi-professionals
women
's.
There is Use synonyms
lot
of difference Change the article
a lot
among
both who worked in Tradespeolpe around 800 000,it has Change preposition
between
highest
among all kinds of Correct article usage
the highest
job
for men with 900 0000 Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
.and
Correct your spelling
and
women
in clerical just below 1000 000 .Use synonyms
On the other hand
,the least employees are girls in Tradespeople and production with 100 000 respectively.Labour and production Linking Words
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
has
550 000 and 400 000 respectively.Below 300 000 female employees worked in labour .Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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