The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
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number of people employed in different fields of work both men and
women
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in Australia
last
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year .
Overall
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, it is clearly noticeable that females
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the highest
employed
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employment
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in clerical and males in Tradespeople.Lowest
women
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in the Production and tradesperson.
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with managers , they are 600 000 male employees and just 200 000
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female , followed by Professionals between 600 000 and 700 000 among both.
Semi-professional
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above 500 000 in men's and below 400 000 in
women
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's. There is
lot
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of difference
among
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both who worked in Tradespeolpe around 800 000,it has
highest
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the highest
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among all kinds of
job
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jobs
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for men with 900 0000
.and
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and
women
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in clerical just below 1000 000 .
On the other hand
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,the least employees are girls in Tradespeople and production with 100 000 respectively.Labour and production
job
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jobs
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has
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550 000 and 400 000 respectively.Below 300 000 female employees worked in labour .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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