Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
students
to
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study
in a
group
or
study
alone at home every day. I think people have different views about whether
students
work collaboratively or
study
by
oneself
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themselves
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. On the one hand, studying in a
group
can bring
students
many benefits.
Firstly
, they
learning
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learn
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a lot of information because many
students
share questions and ideas with
others
. So, I prefer to
study
in
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of groups. If
student
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students
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study
with
others
, they are learning various
subject
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subjects
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.
Secondly
,
students
solve
be
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issues with education and
also
they always know different
subject
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subjects
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true information and increase knowledge.
For example
, my sibling
to
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studies
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study
in a
group
every day
also
he
have
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has
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high knowledge now. My brother learning
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language with
group
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the group
a group
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also
I think
study
very
suberp
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superb
suburb
with
others
.
On the other hand
,many humans think that it is better for them to
study
alone because they always
study
alone I always
study
alone.
Furthermore
, if some people learn
with
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in
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the group
a group
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group
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groups
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their results can be bad because many
students
read hard noisy and they talk about non-science topics.
Besides
that,
pupil's
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pupils
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might decrease
knowledge
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their knowledge
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.
For instance
, my friend
study
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studies
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with
others
and she
don't
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doesn't
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know various
subject
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subjects
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because my friend always
chat
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chats
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conservation
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about conservation
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witht
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with
without
coursemates
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her coursemates
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after she
study
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studies
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start
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starts
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alone in the evening now. In conclusion, many humans learn
different
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in different
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places and
they
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apply
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study
various
subject
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subjects
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and
culture
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cultures
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. In my opinion,
student
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students
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should
study
with
others
and
study
alone.
Furthermore
, many pupils give might
benefits
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benefit
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from
this
method.
Moreover
, I prefer both of
study
.
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Task Achievement
You successfully discussed both views as the task asked, showing a clear understanding of the topic.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion, which is a coherent approach.
Task Achievement
You have attempted to provide examples to support your points, which enhances the relevance of your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer feedback
  • social interaction
  • deep understanding
  • group dynamics
  • personalized learning
  • self-discipline
  • concentration
  • diverse perspectives
  • isolation
  • motivation
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • distractions
  • commitment
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