Write about the following topic: Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In developing or poor
countries
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mostly
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people
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die from curable diseases because they cannot afford the required medication. I believe that
drug
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companies
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should make their
medicine
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at lower
prices
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for
such
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countries
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to save human lives as it is on
the
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top of any
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or monetary benefits. There are various reasons why
medicine
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companies
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should make medicines and sell
at
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them at
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cheap
prices
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in poor
countries
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where
people
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cannot bear their expenses.
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humanity is one of the reasons beyond anything else and it is
also
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a part of established sustainable goals in the world.
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, it is usually said that
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one's life means you are saving the whole
humanity
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of humanity
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.
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, financial benefits are important for any
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to sustain.
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, there is a need to change
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strategy and
fulfill
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monetary requirements from developed or
first world
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first-world
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countries
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.
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,
drug
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companies
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can
lauch
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launch
products and sell in developed or developing
countries
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at different
business
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models or
prices
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by allocating the pricing criteria.
Medicine
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companies
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can specify some portion of
medicine
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as free for low-income
people
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and increase their
prices
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with the increase
of
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in
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income level of
people
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. Ultimately, it reduces the mortality rate of those
people
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who die from curable diseases just because of expensive medication. In conclusion, I believe that
drug
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companies
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should make their products available at reduced
prices
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in poor
countries
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where
majority
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the majority
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of the
people
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die from curable diseases because of expensive medication. Saving humanity and changing
business
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strategy
are
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the sustainable means to make it possible or
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a win-win
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situation both for the
drug
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companies
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and for poor
countries
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.
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