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The bar chart below shows the estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender the last year

The bar chart below shows the estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender the last year
#bar #world #illiteracy #rates #region #gender #year
The following bar chart depicts the illiteracy rate in 6 country groups divided by gender of people. The information is from
last
 year.
Overall
, we can observe that the illiteracy rate of females was higher in each shown region. The highest percentage of illiterate we can see in South Asia,
on the other
hand
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 the
least
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lowest
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number
illiterate
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of illiterate
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 people
were
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 in developed
countries
. In developed and east asian
countries
 the
percentages
 of illiterate males were less than 10%. In
America
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 and Caribbean
countries
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this
number
 is exactly 10%. The
percentages
 of illiterate males were more or less
same
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the same
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 in Arab states, south Asia and Sub-Saharan Africa
round
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around
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 30% each. The
number
 of illiterate females was generally higher than men's
percentages
. The highest percentage of illiterate women was almost 60% in
south
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 Asia. And the
least
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lowest
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number
 of illiterate women was in developed
countries
. In
other
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the other
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 4
regions
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regions,
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 the
percentages
 vary from approximately 10% to around 50%.
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