THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE AVERAGE PERCENTAGES IN TYPICAL MEALS OF THREE TYPES OF NUTRIENTS ALL OF WHICH MAY BE UNHEALTHY IF EATTEN TOO MUCH.

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The three pie charts depict the average proportion of three distinctive nutrients( sodium, saturated fat. and added sugar) in four daily meals of Americans which might hurt

individual's

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an individual's

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health

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if consumed a lot.

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, these nutrients are mostly in

dinner

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than in any other meal,

while

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in breakfast, the percentage of all mentioned nutrients is very low.

Firstly

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, in the sodium pie chart, the biggest segment is

dinner

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which is a little above two-fifths, the smallest segments represent breakfast and

snacks

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, both are above a tenth;

moreover

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, twenty-nine

percent

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per cent

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this

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chart is for lunch.

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, a little under two-thirds of Saturated fat is in

dinner

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which is higher than in any other meal, plus, lunch only provides twenty-six per cent of that nutrition. After that,

snacks

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have twenty-one percent and breakfast only has just above a tenth of Saturated fat.

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, a large amount of added sugar exists in

snacks

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while

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dinner

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provides twenty-three

percent

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per cent

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of that material,

however

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, lunch and

snacks

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have a small proportion of sugar their percentages are nineteen and sixteen respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, snacks with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

176 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

nutrients
average percentage
sodium
saturated fat
added sugar
unhealthy
intake
typical meals
breakfast
lunch
dinner
snacks
contribute
health implications
convenience
taste preferences
cultural habits
balance nutrient intake
maintain a healthy diet

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