THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE AVERAGE PERCENTAGES IN TYPICAL MEALS OF THREE TYPES OF NUTRIENTS ALL OF WHICH MAY BE UNHEALTHY IF EATTEN TOO MUCH.

THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE AVERAGE PERCENTAGES IN TYPICAL MEALS OF THREE TYPES OF NUTRIENTS ALL OF WHICH MAY BE UNHEALTHY IF EATTEN TOO MUCH.
The three pie charts depict the average proportion of three distinctive nutrients( sodium, saturated fat. and added sugar) in four daily meals of Americans which might hurt
individual's
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health
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if consumed a lot.
Overall
, these nutrients are mostly in
dinner
than in any other meal,
while
in breakfast, the percentage of all mentioned nutrients is very low.
Firstly
, in the sodium pie chart, the biggest segment is
dinner
which is a little above two-fifths, the smallest segments represent breakfast and
snacks
, both are above a tenth;
moreover
, twenty-nine
percent
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of
this
chart is for lunch.
Secondly
, a little under two-thirds of Saturated fat is in
dinner
which is higher than in any other meal, plus, lunch only provides twenty-six per cent of that nutrition. After that,
snacks
have twenty-one percent and breakfast only has just above a tenth of Saturated fat.
Finally
, a large amount of added sugar exists in
snacks
while
dinner
provides twenty-three
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of that material,
however
, lunch and
snacks
have a small proportion of sugar their percentages are nineteen and sixteen respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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