The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.

The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.
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The bar chart illustrates the statistics regarding the
number
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of
Japanese
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people
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who
traveled
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outside of the country,
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the line graph depicts the information on the percentage of
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tourists visiting Australia in a 10-year period, starting in 1985.
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, it can be seen that both experienced an upward trend throughout. Regarding the bar chart, in 1985, the
number
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of
Japanese
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tourists
traveling
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abroad
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commenced at the lowest
number
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, at roughly 5 million
people
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. After that, it increased sharply for the next five years, reaching nearly 11 million
people
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in 1990. There was a small fluctuation between 1991 and 1993.
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the
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witnessed
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significant growth, finishing at its peak, with approximately 15 million
people
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at the end
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of the period. Moving on to the line graph, the percentage of
Japanese
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individuals visiting Australia began with 2%. It rose gradually to 5% in 1989.
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, the
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increased and decreased in the next two years.
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it continued to grow minimally, peaking at just over 6% in 1994, it saw a small decrease to exactly 6% in 1995.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japanese, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas tourists
  • chart analysis
  • data interpretation
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • tourist trends
  • economic factors
  • promotional activities
  • visa policies
  • cultural influences
  • social factors
  • culmination of trends
  • speculation
  • preference shifts
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