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Band 4.5

Give your advice to your friend who is planning to move to a new city. In your letter - Describe the different types of accommodation - Give tips to find a good place to live - Explain factors to your friend to consider when finding a place to live

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Dear Jase, How are you? I'm writing
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this
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for
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 give my advice to you. You were calling me
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however
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, when I was
my
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 job. I saw a lot of apartments
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by
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 mobile phone. Now I give feedback about houses. My neighbour is selling themselves flat
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it is
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 good
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 for you. I offer
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 accommodation because it has extremely high bookshelves, big price carpet. It
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 red, blue, pink and brown. There are five rooms.
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house
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 is comfortable, light,
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. It was fixed European style two months ago so very new still. My city is
paradise
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 that there are a lot of shops, bazaars, modern markets, schools and other shopping malls.
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 but not least, they are situated
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 street end. Especially, we have all facilities
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good public transport, shopping
centers
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 and good education opportunities. In my city has very
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 factories and they will offer work.
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, if you
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work, they will
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 fifty
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pound
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a
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week. It is
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 salary for a family. I look forward to hearing from you soon. I am
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 your response with lots of patience. Best wishes, Makhliyo

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structure
To enhance your letter, consider a more structured approach by clearly separating your ideas into paragraphs, focusing on one key piece of advice per paragraph.
content
Remember to address all parts of the prompt more explicitly. While you've touched on different types of accommodation and tips, elaborating more on factors to consider would provide a more complete response.
language
For a clearer and more professional tone, avoid colloquial expressions and ensure the use of correct verb tenses and grammar. This will improve the reader's understanding and engagement with your letter.
tone
Your enthusiasm and friendly tone make the letter engaging and show your willingness to help your friend.
content
You successfully mentioned several types of amenities and facilities available in your city, which is useful information for someone considering moving there.
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