Give your advice to your friend who is planning to move to a new city. In your letter - Describe the different types of accommodation - Give tips to find a good place to live - Explain factors to your friend to consider when finding a place to live
Dear Jase,
How are you?
I'm writing
to
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apply
this
letter for
give my advice to you. You were calling me Change preposition
to
however
, when I was Add the comma(s)
, however
my
job. I saw a lot of apartments Change preposition
at my
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on by
by
mobile phone. Now I give feedback about houses.
My neighbour is selling themselves flat Correct your spelling
my
that
it is Correct word choice
apply
very
good Correct article usage
a very
chose
for you. I offer Replace the word
choice
this
accommodation because it has extremely high bookshelves, big price carpet. It is colors
red, blue, pink and brown. There are five rooms. Change the verb form
is colored
Furthermore
, house
is comfortable, light, Add an article
the house
beautiful
. It was fixed European style two months ago so very new still.
My city is Correct word choice
and beautiful
paradise
that there are a lot of shops, bazaars, modern markets, schools and other shopping malls. Add an article
a paradise
the paradise
Last
but not least, they are situated our
street end. Especially, we have all facilities Change preposition
on our
such
as a
good public transport, shopping Correct article usage
apply
centers
and good education opportunities.
In my city has very Change the spelling
centres
much
factories and they will offer work. Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
Moreover
, if you will
work, they will Verb problem
apply
paying
fifty Change the verb form
pay
be paying
puond
Correct your spelling
pound
pounds
pond
for
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per
a
week. It is Correct article usage
apply
good
salary for a family.
I look forward to hearing from you soon. I am Add an article
a good
waiting
your response with lots of patience.
Best wishes,
MakhliyoAdd the preposition
waiting for
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structure
To enhance your letter, consider a more structured approach by clearly separating your ideas into paragraphs, focusing on one key piece of advice per paragraph.
content
Remember to address all parts of the prompt more explicitly. While you've touched on different types of accommodation and tips, elaborating more on factors to consider would provide a more complete response.
language
For a clearer and more professional tone, avoid colloquial expressions and ensure the use of correct verb tenses and grammar. This will improve the reader's understanding and engagement with your letter.
tone
Your enthusiasm and friendly tone make the letter engaging and show your willingness to help your friend.
content
You successfully mentioned several types of amenities and facilities available in your city, which is useful information for someone considering moving there.