The diagram belows show the production of olive oil.
The chart which is provided above presents the making of olive oil through step-by-step actions and instructions.
Overall
, the procedure has 7 different and complex steps that start with the picking of the fruits from trees to Linking Words
it
being stored and sold in markets in the Correct pronoun usage
apply
last
stage.
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To begin
with, the creation begins by picking off the olives from their tree after which they are sent to a rinsing machine to be washed clean with cold water as the second step of the procedure. Following Linking Words
which
, the olives are smashed by a machine to Correct pronoun usage
this
seperate
the seeds from the fruits.
Correct your spelling
separate
Then
the following olive paste is put into a bag with holes in it Linking Words
that is
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consequently
compressed by a pressing machine to separate the oil from the water. Linking Words
Finally
, in the Linking Words
last
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stage
the olive oil is Add a comma
stage,
packeged
and sent to shops to be sold to the public.Correct your spelling
packaged
packed
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