You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move, Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Explain why you decided to move Compare your new home with your previous home Tell him/her about the area you are now living in

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I am writing

this

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letter regarding

t moved

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moving

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to Ho Chi Minh

City

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which I did not have a chance to tell you

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about, however

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however

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however,

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I would like to mention

that

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apply

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the reason I moved.

Firstly

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, I found that I want to go developed

city

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to find a better job. In my

opinion

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opinion,

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here it is

crowed

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crowded

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and more

develop

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developed

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than Hue

city

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furthermore

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there I have

opportunity

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the opportunity

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to develop myself and earn a lot of money.

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the other hand,

this

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City

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very

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beautiful

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it has good weather,

furthermore

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neighbor

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the neighbor

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very

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is very

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friendly and beloved

one

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apply

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. I feel happy and cheerful here. Generally, it is neither big nor small but it

is provides

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provides

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dweller

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dwellers

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all

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with all

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necessary

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the necessary

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facilities

besides

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that it is famous for

delicious

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its delicious

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foods, suitable go to

traveling

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. Please come here when you have the chance. I hope to hear from you soon Best regards Minh chi

quynhtranhbhMon Apr 29 2024

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Task Achievement

Consider adding more detail to your explanation of why you moved, offering deeper insight into your decision-making process.

Coherence & Cohesion

Try to organize your ideas more clearly, perhaps by dedicating a separate paragraph to each main point for better flow.

General

Work on improving your grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary for better clarity and impact.

Task Achievement

You successfully communicated the main objectives of the letter, sharing your reasons for moving and describing your new home and area.

Tone

You've maintained a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, creating a sense of warmth and personal connection.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

148 words

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You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move, Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Explain why you decided to move Compare your new home with your previous home Tell him/her about the area you are now living in

The Greeting

In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development which occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

The job market today is very competitive and it is best to choose a career or field of study early in order to get a good job later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, students live at home with their family while they study at university, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do the advantages of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

You arranges to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - explain the important event - apologise for the situation - suggest a new arrangement