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You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move, Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Explain why you decided to move Compare your new home with your previous home Tell him/her about the area you are now living in

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I am writing
this
 letter regarding
t moved
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moving
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 to Ho Chi Minh
City
 which I did not have a chance to tell you
,
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about, however
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however
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however,
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 I would like to mention
that
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apply
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the reason I moved.
Firstly
, I found that I want to go developed
city
 to find a better job. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 here it is
crowed
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crowded
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 and more
develop
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developed
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 than Hue
city
furthermore
 there I have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to develop myself and earn a lot of money.
One
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On
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 the other hand,
this
City
very
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is very
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 beautiful
moreover
 it has good weather,
furthermore
neighbor
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the neighbor
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very
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is very
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 friendly and beloved
one
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apply
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. I feel happy and cheerful here. Generally, it is neither big nor small but it
is provides
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provides
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dweller
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dwellers
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all
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with all
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necessary
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the necessary
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 facilities
besides
 that it is famous for
delicious
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its delicious
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 foods, suitable go to
traveling
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travelling
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. Please come here when you have the chance. I hope to hear from you soon Best regards Minh chi
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Task Achievement
Consider adding more detail to your explanation of why you moved, offering deeper insight into your decision-making process.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly, perhaps by dedicating a separate paragraph to each main point for better flow.
General
Work on improving your grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary for better clarity and impact.
Task Achievement
You successfully communicated the main objectives of the letter, sharing your reasons for moving and describing your new home and area.
Tone
You've maintained a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, creating a sense of warmth and personal connection.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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