task 2: Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life. How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
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Firstly
, we need to find out why adults
need to learn how to manage money
. This
will help limit future financial risks and have money
to pay unexpected expenses. However
, you need to distinguish between frugality and frugality, and should not restrain excessive spending that affects the quality of life
. This
skill helps you manage the financial process for each specific project such
as necessary expenses, emergency funds
, savings funds
, education funds
, charity funds
, etc. Management and control to support you at all times when financial events occur. This
reduces financial pressure and ensures a better quality of life
.
Secondly
, we need to know how adults
can learn to manage money
. Thinking for the future is also
a way for them to know how to save money
so they can use that money
for the future. In addition
, they need to work hard to have enough money
to save, especially not to buy unnecessary things. As a simple example, adults
can deposit savings in banks so they don't have to spend their money
while
losing control, it ensures you
both physical and mental safety. Above are simple and quite important solutions for those who are just starting to learn how to save.
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Finally
, I give my advice on why and what to do about learning to save as adults
.Not knowing how to control it can be very dangerous, so people really need to pay attention to it.Submitted by thuhong.68hnue on
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Introduction clarity
Try to directly address the essay question from the beginning and clarify your stand. The introduction could be more focused on the topic of money management.
Use of examples
Include more specific examples from real-life situations or personal experiences to strengthen your arguments.
Conclusion
Ensure a clear conclusion that summarises your arguments and reiterates your stance on the topic.
Coherence
Work on making your essay structure more coherent by using clearer transitional phrases and ensuring each paragraph flows logically to the next.
Cohesion
Enhance cohesion by linking your ideas more clearly. Use a variety of linking words and make sure they are used correctly.
Grammar and Vocabulary
While managing minor inaccuracies, try to ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and your vocabulary is varied to convey your ideas effectively.
Engagement with topic
You have engaged with the topic and provided some relevant advice for managing money, showing an understanding of the importance of financial management.
Essay Structure
Your essay structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is good practice.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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