The graph below shows the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The graph below shows the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
The line chart illustrates how many
times
Australian teenagers ate three different types of fast food including
pizza
,
fish
and
chips
and
hamburgers
between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
consumption
of
hamburgers
and
pizza
increased considerably,
whereas
the figure for
fish
and
chips
decreased over the period given. In 1975,
fish
and
chips
were the most popular fast food consumed by Australian teenagers, with 100
times
,
while
much less
pizza
and
hamburgers
were eaten in similar quantities (just less than 20
times
).
However
, during
this
25-year period, the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
experienced a downward trend, falling dramatically to under 40
times
,
although
it rose between 1980 and 1985.
On the other hand
, the
consumption
of
hamburgers
showed an upward trend, overtaking that of
fish
and
chips
in 1986. By 2000 it had risen significantly to more than 100
times
.
Also
, the
consumption
of
pizza
saw a rising tendency, and it exceeded that of
fish
and
chips
in 1993 before growing to over 80
times
.
Finally
, it remained unchanged in the
last
5 years.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words times, pizza, fish, chips, hamburgers, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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