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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features.
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The line chart illustrates the annual
carbon
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dioxide
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pollution
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 per person from 1967 to 2007 in the United
Kingdom
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, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal. It is noticeable that the emissions in the UK have higher
pollution
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 than other countries.
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, the number of
pollution
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 in Portugal has lower emissions but the amount of
pollution
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 increased
year
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 by
year
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. In 1967, the United
Kingdom
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 had the highest
pollution
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 which was approximately 11 metric
tonnes
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 but the amount of
pollution
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 in the United
Kingdom
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 slightly decreased
year
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 by
year
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,
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was approximately 10.7 metric
tonnes
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 in the first decade, 10 metric
tonnes
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 in the second decade, 9 metric
tonnes
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 in 1997, and 8.5 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007, which were the highest of pollutions.
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, the range between Sweden and the United
Kingdom
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 fluctuated
year
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 by
year
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, which was approximately 2 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967, 0.5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977 and 3 metric
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 in 1987.
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, the gap between Sweden and the United
Kingdom
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 from 1997 to 2007 steadily decreased, which was approximately 3 metric
tonnes
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. In terms of the average of
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dioxide
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, Italy sharply increased, with was starting point
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at
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 4.2 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967, 6.2 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977, 6.5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1987, and close to 8 metric
tonnes
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 from 1997 to 2007,
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which
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 the amount was stable.
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, the number of
pollution
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 in Portugal rose
year
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 by
year
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.
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, the range of
carbon
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dioxide
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 between Portugal and Italy was steady at 2 metric
tonnes
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, pollution, kingdom, year, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average per capita
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • compare/contrast
  • period/stable
  • turning point
  • fluctuations
  • environmental policies
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sustainable practices
  • emission reduction targets
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy sources
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