The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart shows the main reasons for using
phones
by teenagers in an African country between 2016
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2019
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and 2019
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.
Overall
, the main
reason
for using
phones
over the years was for social networking, followed by emailing
but
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which saw a gradual
decline
over the years. Making calls was the least popular
reason
for using
phones
,
while
the
use
of
phones
to
use
the camera remained relatively stable. Social networking was by far the most
comon
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common
reason
for usage of
phones
from about 50% in 2016,
although
it saw a very slight
decline
over the years 2017 and 2018, the need to
use
social networking rose to about 56% in 2019.
Although
emailing remained the second most
reason
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common reason
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for using
phones
from 2016
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2017 with about 25%, it slowly saw a gradual
decline
to 20% in 2018 and 19% in 2019 making it the 3rd most popular
reason
for using
phones
. The need to
use
phones
to take pictures was not very popular from 2016-2017 as it remained in 3rd place with about 15%,
although
it saw a gradual rise in 2019 to 18%,
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it took
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2nd place in 2019 with about 20%. Making calls using
phones
was not a very popular need right from 2016 and it
remianed
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remained
last
with
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about
10% from 2016
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the numbers saw a
decline
, though not very significantly to 5% in 2019.
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