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The table below gives information on consumer spending

The table below gives information on consumer spending
The table diagram shows the percentage
on
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of
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people
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 who
cost
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spent
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 on several
product
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products
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 in five countries in 2002. Turkey
get
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has
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 the highest percentage
on
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of
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people
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 who pay for food and drinks, which is 32.14%, and
ireland
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Ireland
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 have 28.91%
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people
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of people
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 in
this
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 case which is second high, other
countrys
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countries
 like Sweden, Italy and
spain
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Spain
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 are all between 15% to 19%. On the cloth spending, Italy have 9%
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people
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of people
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to
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apply
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pay for it, and it is
highest
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the highest
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 number when
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compared
compare
copare
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compared
 with others,
Overall
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,
People
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 are likely to spend money on consumption items
such
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 as diet and beverage
,
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apply
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 and pay less on leisure things.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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