the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status

the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
The bar chart demonstrates the amount of free
time
in a typical week between males and females in the
time
period from 1998 to 1999.
Overall
, the men’s leisure
time
was more than women’s free
time
only in 3 categories from five categories, namely employed full
time
, unemployed and retired. In the other two classifications, there is no data about men who are: employed part-
time
and housewives. In employed
full-timetime
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full-time time
full-time-time
men had about 50
hours
,
while
women had 38
hours
in
this
time
.
However
, the categories for unemployed males and females were exactly the same as those for retired individuals between about 85 and 75
hours
in the
time
period within a week respectively. Employed part-
time
had a rest of four hundred
hours
and housewives had more than 20
hours
than employees.
Finally
, they enjoyed forty-eight
hours
. There is not any data for the
2figures
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2 figures
which were housewives and unemployed.
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