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the chart below shows the result of a surevey about people cooffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities

the chart below shows the result of a surevey about people cooffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities
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The bar chart gives information about the
numbsr
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number
 of humans consuming
diffirent
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different
type
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types
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 of drinks in five cities Which is Sydney Melbourne Brisbane
Adelaide
 Hobart town.
Owerall
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Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
yhe
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the
he
consuption
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consumption
 of drinks
experenced
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experienced
experience
 km dramatic sales . In Sydney Melbourne Hobart towns
was
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 more sold
coffe
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coffee
 or tea
then
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than
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Adelaide
 and Brisbane As the bar chart shows various
cites
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cities
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drinking
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drink
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 tea or coffee.
Firstly
 in
sydney
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Sydney
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 significantly
fresh
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more fresh
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 coffee and instant coffee around 43 and 48
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however
 went to cafes more than
anothers
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others
. Truning
second
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the second
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 bar chart and Hobart cities
shows
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show
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 the same pointers. Coffes around 43 and 40
another
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other
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 lines
the
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are the
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 same. Regarding
to
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apply
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Brisbane town's drinking tea or
another
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other
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 swallows higher than
Adelaide
 towns. But
also
Adelaide
 showed lower indicators compared to other cities.
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