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Some people think that e-books are the death of paper book. While other things that paper book will never disappear. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #e-books #death #paper #book
It is an
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 truth that,
book
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 Imparts very vital knowledge. Certeim
hurmans
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assert
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 that PDF
of
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the
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book
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books
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 is the reason for
decrease
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the decrease
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the
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 value of Physical
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books
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.
Whereas many
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 people think that, it will not
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paper
book
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books
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. Both statements will be investigated in upcoming Paragraphs. There are certain reasons which will low the Popularity of
paper
book
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books
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. The first and foremost reason is
it's
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 Storage. By
this
 what I mean is,
hundreds
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that hundreds
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 of books can be stored in just one Pen drive.
Secondly
,
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the e-book
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book
 has longer life as
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 to Physical
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books
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.
For instance
, any
book
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computer
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a computer
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 or any other device can
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 as it is, even after hundreds of years.
In addition
,
e-
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e-books
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book
is
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 very easy to use. In simple words, anyone can read or take
e-
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an e-book
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book
 anywhere
as
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 well
as
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is
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 easy to carry.
On the other hand
,
Physical
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a Physical
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book
 has
it
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 own advantages.
Firstly
,
Paper
 books are always friendly to read. In
othe
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other
 words , a Person can read Physical
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 how long he wants to read. It will not
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burden
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 on
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 eyes which is
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while
 reading
e-
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e-books
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book
in
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Phone
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a Phone
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. Another factor which can not be
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that is
 connection.
For example
. an individual is able to feel the story of
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a book
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 in the time of reading
Physical
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a Physical
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book
 and
also
 relate with
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too
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, which is inevitable.
To sum up
, there are myriad factors. which
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e-
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e-books
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book
instead
 of
paper
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books
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,
however
, it can not provide the feeling of reading as
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 to Physical
book
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books
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. In my opinion,
Paper
 books are always
good
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 option to read and attain crucial information from it.
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Language Accuracy
Be mindful of spelling and capitalize words only when necessary. For instance, 'Undeniable' should be 'undeniable', and 'Physical' doesn't need to be capitalized unless it starts a sentence.
Language Complexity
Enhance your essay by varying sentence structures and using complex grammatical constructions to express your ideas more effectively.
Paragraph Structure
Organize your paragraphs clearly with topic sentences and concluding statements. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea that's tied back to the essay question.
Linking Words
Use transitional phrases to link ideas between sentences and paragraphs clearly. This will help your essay flow more smoothly and make your arguments more coherent.
Argument Development
Try to present both views and your opinion with balanced coverage and depth. Including specific examples to support your points makes your argument more convincing.
Introduction & Conclusion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion that frames your essay effectively.
Understanding of Topic
Your essay touches upon significant points for both sides of the argument, showing a good understanding of the topic.
Use of Examples
Including examples, like the longevity of e-books and the tactile connection with paper books, adds depth to your discussion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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