The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
The line chart provides
a key information
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about the
number
of enrolments of
a
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international
students
at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009 from three countries
Iran
, Greek and
Turky
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Turkey
. The units are measured in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of
students
.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that
Greece
had the highest
number
of
enrolment
between the three
counries
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countries
in 2005.
In addition
,
Iran
had the lowest
number
of
enrolment
in 2005,
whereas
the
number
of
enrolment
increased and it became the highest in 2008.
According to
what is shown,
Greece
shows
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a high
nubmers
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number
of
enrolment
at the
begin
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of 2005 but over the years it faced a significant drop in
the
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enrolments
espicialy
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especially
from 2005 to 2007. By 2007,
Greece
and
Iran
had become the same amount of 60
students
enrolment
but it did not
last
to
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much, after 2007,
the
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Greece
's
enrolment
droped
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dropped
a tiny amount, and went to the lowest
number
by 2009 with
approximetly
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approximately
40
students
. In terms of
Iran
and
Turky
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Turkey
, they
begun
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with
lowest
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the lowest
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numbers of
enrolment
compered
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compared
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to
Greece
. They faced a notable
increasing
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increase
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from 2005 and 2009.
Iran
had the highest student
enrolment
with almost 160
students
and
Turky
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Turkey
above 120.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, iran, greece, enrolment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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